Now that a third agent has said they loved the storyline but the writing, not so much (they didn’t actually say ‘rotten.’ The term the last one used was ‘not compelling’), I have decided major changes are in order for the beginning two chapters. I honestly, truly believed that if they had read the next ten pages (or perhaps the next two paragraphs, because that’s how it works) they would have like it much better. So I’ve started massive revisions. Check out the first two pages. Don’t tell me if you think it’s worse. I will be sad.